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I show my true art and
They broke my heart
They gave me new scars and labels
They sent me crashing through the world
Causing others to shun me away in disgust
Somehow I crashed into your angelic arms
I waited for you to sent me in disgust
Instead you held me tight as if trying to push all the pieces of my heart together
And you showed how to get out the Shadows of the Forgotten
And into the Light of the Forgiven
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SuperSonicRaver Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012
This is good. It really defines what it means to be raw.
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PinkChickenInk Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012  Student General Artist
:hug:
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Lovely-Madness-13 Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful!!
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PinkChickenInk Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Student General Artist
thankies :icondummywooplz:
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Folded-Note Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Nah, a lot of unnecessary anti-dramatic capitalization.
This isn't free verse really, feels like you are trying really hard to make it fit rather than flow.

Not bad, not different.
Alright..
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PinkChickenInk Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Student General Artist
You mean when i capitalize the first word of every line? I thought a lot of poets do that
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Folded-Note Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Student General Artist
No, like in the last lines you made Light and stuff in CAPs.
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PinkChickenInk Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Student General Artist
You're right it is unnecessary but i do it anyway cuz for me its a actual place. I put it in Free Verse because i didn't know any other place to put it in. I can't flow that well so i like my poems to fit together like puzzle pieces.
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PhotoPhobee Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is pretty cool. it's very visual
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PinkChickenInk Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Student General Artist
"visual" That is a word i like to hear about my poem. Thank you ^^
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